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<blockquote data-quote="clowned" data-source="post: 36928" data-attributes="member: 3674"><p>Stuckinthetv,</p><p></p><p>Thank you for your application. There are some grammatical mistakes in your application that I'd like to discuss with you. Remember, moderators should have excellent oral and written communication skills.</p><p></p><p></p><p><strong>Why do you want to be a part of the AtomicRP Staff Team?</strong></p><p></p><p></p><p>While it's not illegal to start a sentence with 'because'— the sentence must be complete. As it is written in your response, it is incomplete. Add a comma after 'because' and it would work!</p><p></p><p>Remember, 'alot' is written as 'a lot'.</p><p></p><p>"I'd also greatly enjoy helping other's with misconduct and trouble that they may be in." This is a situation where you don't need an apostrophe after 'other'. The apostrophe has two main use-case scenarios: to indicate a contraction or to show ownership. In this situation, it's not fulfilling either of those requirements.</p><p></p><p>You don't need to capitalize 'staff'. You didn't earlier in your response but did in the third sentence.</p><p></p><p></p><p><strong>Why should you be accepted onto the AtomicRP Staff Team?</strong></p><p></p><p></p><p>Again, starting a sentence with 'because' still has to express a complete thought. The easiest fix would be to add a comma immediately after 'because'.</p><p></p><p>Remember, contractions 'I'm' and 'I'd' should use a capitalized I. There are several instances where you wrote them uncapitalized.</p><p></p><p>I would avoid using "i'm an extremely nice individual" as a selling point in your application. We're certainly hoping that you are nice but that is an expectation that goes without being said.</p><p></p><p>You used 'extremely' three times in one paragraph. Perhaps you could mix in some other adjectives to express how you feel. Repeated use of the same adjective causes it to lose its potency when used too often.</p><p></p><p>I think you could further improve the quality of your application by tidying up the syntax and your use of semantics.</p><p></p><p>-1</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="clowned, post: 36928, member: 3674"] Stuckinthetv, Thank you for your application. There are some grammatical mistakes in your application that I'd like to discuss with you. Remember, moderators should have excellent oral and written communication skills. [B]Why do you want to be a part of the AtomicRP Staff Team?[/B] While it's not illegal to start a sentence with 'because'— the sentence must be complete. As it is written in your response, it is incomplete. Add a comma after 'because' and it would work! Remember, 'alot' is written as 'a lot'. "I'd also greatly enjoy helping other's with misconduct and trouble that they may be in." This is a situation where you don't need an apostrophe after 'other'. The apostrophe has two main use-case scenarios: to indicate a contraction or to show ownership. In this situation, it's not fulfilling either of those requirements. You don't need to capitalize 'staff'. You didn't earlier in your response but did in the third sentence. [B]Why should you be accepted onto the AtomicRP Staff Team?[/B] Again, starting a sentence with 'because' still has to express a complete thought. The easiest fix would be to add a comma immediately after 'because'. Remember, contractions 'I'm' and 'I'd' should use a capitalized I. There are several instances where you wrote them uncapitalized. I would avoid using "i'm an extremely nice individual" as a selling point in your application. We're certainly hoping that you are nice but that is an expectation that goes without being said. You used 'extremely' three times in one paragraph. Perhaps you could mix in some other adjectives to express how you feel. Repeated use of the same adjective causes it to lose its potency when used too often. I think you could further improve the quality of your application by tidying up the syntax and your use of semantics. -1 [/QUOTE]
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